trifecta !

 

Trifecta consists of two weekly challenges: one weekday prompt and one weekend prompt.

This weekend’s challenge is to give us a story or snippet of a story which includes, in exactly 33 words, a justified exclamation point.  Make us believe that your exclamation point simply needs to be in your story.  The writer with the most believable exclamation wins.

Here is my entry:

Dare blame me
for your tomorrow.
Dare care not
for  my  sorrow.
Dare come here,
Dare hurt me.
Dare leave
words unspoken.
Dare try break
my heart.
Already broken.
Dare!
I dare you.

 

Lizzie Cracked (not broken)

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43 responses to “trifecta !

      • damn skippy! (i already had my body suit on and READY!! ) it actually started off as a comment reply from Friday… Origianlly 73 words… did you do yours yet? I have looked in all the usual places and don;t want to miss it…. it’s still kinda messy over here…

      • No, I’m sitting this one out.
        Don’t really have anything to match what’s already up (including yours), and didn’t see the point of flooding inboxes.
        Here’s what I had

        I saw the bus coming.
        I saw the pedestrian step in to the street.
        I remembered the laws of physics:
        Two bodies can’t occupy the same space at the same time.

        LOOK OUT!

        Yours is much better!

      • I think you should enter it…. It’;s good! (see that !) you took a fairly common reason for exclamation – look out!.. get outta the way!…and really added to ti with the law of physics thing and used only 33 words, … I like it a lot. 🙂 thanks for sharing it with me..

    • It is fun. The challenge for me really has been the word count more than anything. Give it a go.. there are a few hours left today and then the Weekly challenge comes out tomorrow morning.

      • Yeah, damn word count! It is challenging but that’s the draw (& fun of it)! I keep breaking from other things to work on this – HA! If I can’t make today, I’m certainly looking forward to more of these : )

  1. Bravo! Yay!

    I can’t get mine to link up for some reason. Soooo annoying. And time consuming. Grrr!

    Oh well. Loved your poem, Lizzie. It says to much. and I love what you did the with Exclamation point! 🙂

  2. I really like this one, as I did yours last weekend’s. Your poems really stand out for me. I think if we were to vote again, you’d have mine once again.

    • awww thanks! that makes me feel all warm and fuzzy –
      If would have pointed left field… outta the park is even better! I like sneaky too.. ninja like ….

  3. That’s an excellent piece. I like the way it sets the reader into a defiant moment, like the point in an argument where one person who has been getting verbally beaten down by the other suddenly turns and lashes back.

  4. I’ll give it a try with:

    Where were you,
    when I needed you,
    where were you,
    when I wanted you,
    where were you,
    when I looked for you,
    but mostly,
    where are you now?
    Answer me once,
    damn you!

  5. I like this one a lot. I loved both the rhythm and the meassge here and your use of the exclamation point it wholly justified. Nice job. Thanks for linking up and see you for the weekday challenge we hope.

    • Thank you, I really struggled with this one – I had the exclamation point in two different places and couldn’t decide which worked best, I look forward to seeing what;s next,

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